The layout is nice, the page reads very well. I like the aged effect you did around the outer boarder, it gives the whole comic a neat atmosphere.

Thanks much I'm glad you say it reads well, I kinda struggled with that...I haven't had much practice writing dialogue, and writing composition has NEVER come naturally for me...I would sit back and look at what I'd written, and be like "wait...people don't really talk like that...". But then it always seems to flow better when I just do what comes natural instead of over-planning and over-analyzing....but thats a hard habit to break

Great job!
Love the coloring and the how you captured action in your scenes.
Looks like a professional comic strip.
See you,

Estrella

Ahhhh goody! Chris strikes again!!!
Again a very nice page filled with a with a pinch of westen scent and a drop of old essence...

Colors, strokes and details all added up to create a great atmosphere... once again, great job!!!

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All colours are the friends of their neighbours and the lovers of their opposites. - Marc Chagall

Thank you very much!! I was a little insecure about this one, just 'cause of some of the problems it gave me, so its good to hear that...its umm...good!

Thanks Sonia!!! I'm thrilled that you liked it!!!

This again looks really good Chris. The colors and the strokes make it work really well.

As for the writing, I sort of envisioned it different. After reading your character treatment i envisioned her as someone who was a real bad guy, who turned gooder (not a real word) as the story went on without even sort of realizing it. So i think my main problem is, if this is the beginning, she's way to nice. She's supposed to be this dangerous bandit but she's talking like a 14 year old girl. How she says "sorry bout that!!" and "i love your doorbell" doesn't really seem to fit into one of the most dangerous bandits dialouge.

But, this is your character not mine, and this could be exactly how you envisioned it. Just telling you my thoughts.

Haha well Cliff, I can see where you are coming from with this confusion...

I suppose my explanation would be....that her tough "persona" is more the product of all the rumors and hearsay of the civilians, when in reality she dosen't fit the part at all...being modest and neurotic (sp?) but still possessing some unatural abilities and strength. Her cohorts are especially responsible for strengthening that image, being much more of big-talkers who "threaten" in her place...

Basically, she is forced into being this feared person...but being kinda "undercover" in this situation, it was an opportunity to show her very un-threatening side. Hopefully that helps, I'm trying to keep things as consistent as possible but sometimes I can't make up my mind about characters

Ooooh yeah and thanks for pointing something like this out, I appreciate ya taking the time you have to analyze, because character developement is something I feel I really need to work on so any criticism is helpful